Reply #1: They are both very good!

[Elise]

suggestions (well, you asked):

Poem 1:

Lose the ethnic name on the teacher;

1st stanza, 4th line, replace humor would with humor'd;

2nd stanza, 4th line = Yet, Mr. Watson actually expected that I'd figure area and mass;

3rd stanza, 2nd line: Knots twisting in my stomach, tempering my cool;

3rd stanza, 4th line: Hoped my being funny wouldn't equate to being the fool;

6th stanza, 4th line: I kicked myself for wasted chances, but that was now the past;

7th stanza, 4th line: replace really hot with wonderful;

9th stanza, 3rd line; replace lips with mouth.


Poem 2:

I'm not thrilled with the title, (maybe "the shore beckons" ... ???), but the poem itself is an absolute work of art: BRAVO!

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