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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 01:27 AM
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My newest poem!Updated at 9:21 PM
“Thoughts”

full of thoughts
my mind churns with them
where they will go
I have no idea

They carry me along
down this tumbling river
full of stones, boulders and fallen trees

But I am fine

My thoughts
foam with the water
and the banks of the river
are high
with tree roots and ferns
and the occasional deer

feeding

in the misty air
hanging over the river
that is full of my

thoughts.


© MLC
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   That's how I feel sometimes Peggy.  bluesbassman   Nov-01-09 01:19 AM   #1 
   My dear bluesbassman...  CaliforniaPeggy   Nov-01-09 01:21 AM   #2 
   You know, Peggy, if you don't already know this song...  Amerigo Vespucci   Nov-01-09 01:35 AM   #3 
   My dear Amerigo Vespucci...  CaliforniaPeggy   Nov-01-09 01:48 AM   #4 
   Sounds like something I would have written  Prisoner_Number_Six   Nov-01-09 02:18 AM   #5 
   My dear Prisoner_Number_Six...  CaliforniaPeggy   Nov-01-09 02:21 AM   #6 
      I knew you were gonna say that...  Prisoner_Number_Six   Nov-01-09 02:25 AM   #8 
         And I knew you were too!  CaliforniaPeggy   Nov-01-09 02:39 AM   #10 
   Very nice  pokerfan   Nov-01-09 02:24 AM   #7 
   My dear pokerfan!  CaliforniaPeggy   Nov-01-09 02:35 AM   #9 
   I don't ever read the poems but I was bored so I did with this one  JonLP24   Nov-01-09 03:50 AM   #11 
   My dear JonLP24!  CaliforniaPeggy   Nov-01-09 11:54 AM   #18 
   Very nice, Peggy  Tobin S.   Nov-01-09 05:09 AM   #12 
   I thank you, my dear Tobin!  CaliforniaPeggy   Nov-01-09 11:55 AM   #19 
   Thanks Peggy  theNotoriousP.I.G.   Nov-01-09 05:54 AM   #13 
   You're welcome, sweetie...  CaliforniaPeggy   Nov-01-09 11:57 AM   #20 
   Very Good  RadicalGeek   Nov-01-09 06:49 AM   #14 
   I thank you, my dear RadicalGeek! (nt)  CaliforniaPeggy   Nov-01-09 11:57 AM   #21 
      YVW  RadicalGeek   Nov-01-09 12:15 PM   #25 
         I hear that...  CaliforniaPeggy   Nov-01-09 12:17 PM   #26 
   Very well done Peggy.  Callalily   Nov-01-09 07:01 AM   #15 
   My dear Callalily...  CaliforniaPeggy   Nov-01-09 11:59 AM   #22 
   It reminds me a little of Gordon Lightfoot's "River of Light"  Haole Girl   Nov-01-09 10:03 AM   #16 
   My dear Haole Girl...  CaliforniaPeggy   Nov-01-09 12:01 PM   #23 
   Wow, I'd love to have the audio file if you ever record this.  Pool Hall Ace   Nov-01-09 11:46 AM   #17 
      My dear Pool Hall Ace!  CaliforniaPeggy   Nov-01-09 12:03 PM   #24 
 
bluesbassman Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Sun Nov-01-09 01:19 AM
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1. That's how I feel sometimes Peggy.
"down this tumbling river full of stones, boulders and fallen trees".

Very apt description.

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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 01:21 AM
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2. My dear bluesbassman...Updated at 9:21 PM
I'm so glad my little work illuminated a bit of your life for you...

Thank you, sweetie...

:hug:
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Amerigo Vespucci Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Sun Nov-01-09 01:35 AM
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3. You know, Peggy, if you don't already know this song...
...I'll bet you would enjoy it.

"River Song" by the late Dennis Wilson of The Beach Boys:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QTDAt_afhEs

...when he released his solo album "Pacific Ocean Blue" in 1977, he was "The Beach Boy Least Likely" to release ANY solo material of merit.

But critics agree that it was stronger than ANYTHING Carl or Brian had in the hopper at that time.

Life IS a river, and we are in its currents, and we either bond with it or are destroyed by it.

:toast:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 01:48 AM
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4. My dear Amerigo Vespucci... Updated at 9:21 PM
That was a great song...

Thank you!

I did not know it...and I should have...those guys were my neighbors! Well, not literally, lol...

I appreciate your comments...

:toast:
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Prisoner_Number_Six Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Sun Nov-01-09 02:18 AM
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5. Sounds like something I would have written
The subject has actually been on my mind recently. Thank you for putting it into words.
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 02:21 AM
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6. My dear Prisoner_Number_Six... Updated at 9:21 PM
Well, now there's a compliment of the highest order...

Thank you, sweetie!

Funny how we can tap into each other's consciousness, isn't it?

:hug:
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Prisoner_Number_Six Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Sun Nov-01-09 02:25 AM
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8. I knew you were gonna say that...
:rofl:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 02:39 AM
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10. And I knew you were too!Updated at 9:21 PM
See?

We've tapped into each other's consciousness!

:rofl:
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pokerfan Donating Member (1000+ posts) Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Sun Nov-01-09 02:24 AM
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7. Very nice
I hope the poem wars are over! :rofl:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 02:35 AM
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9. My dear pokerfan!Updated at 9:21 PM
Thank you!

Frankly, darling, those people can say whatever they want!

I no longer give a ****!

:rofl:
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JonLP24 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Sun Nov-01-09 03:50 AM
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11. I don't ever read the poems but I was bored so I did with this one
I'm no poem expert so bare with me but I like it and the way it 'flows' if you understand what I mean. Very descriptive and it's not 'all over the place' like if I were to attempt a poem.
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 11:54 AM
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18. My dear JonLP24!Updated at 9:21 PM
Well, now, I thank you...

I understand what you say...

Believe me, you would not want to see my early stuff! Learning how to write is a process, and I'm still in it. But there is progress...
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Tobin S. Donating Member (1000+ posts) Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Sun Nov-01-09 05:09 AM
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12. Very nice, Peggy
I'm no expert, but I think you've come a long way with your poetry.
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 11:55 AM
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19. I thank you, my dear Tobin!Updated at 9:21 PM
I feel as though I've come some distance too...

The workshop I'm taking is making a difference.
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theNotoriousP.I.G. Donating Member (1000+ posts) Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 05:54 AM
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13. Thanks Peggy
:thumbsup:

Nicely done Peggy.
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 11:57 AM
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20. You're welcome, sweetie...Updated at 9:21 PM
I appreciate it...

:hug:
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14. Very Good Updated at 6:45 AM
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 11:57 AM
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21. I thank you, my dear RadicalGeek! (nt)Updated at 9:21 PM
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RadicalGeek (106 posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Sun Nov-01-09 12:15 PM
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25. YVWUpdated at 6:45 AM
I occasionally write verse myself--not as much as I used to. Working two jobs and going to IT classes doesn't leave a lot of downtime :(
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 12:17 PM
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26. I hear that...Updated at 9:21 PM
I hope the day comes when you will once again have time...

:hug:
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Callalily Donating Member (1000+ posts) Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Sun Nov-01-09 07:01 AM
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15. Very well done Peggy.
I always enjoy reading your poems.

Yes, thoughts do seem to have a life all their own.

:hug:
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 11:59 AM
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22. My dear Callalily...Updated at 9:21 PM
Rivers make great metaphors for life...

And thoughts go right there too...

Thank you, sweetie...

:hug:
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Haole Girl Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 10:03 AM
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16. It reminds me a little of Gordon Lightfoot's "River of Light"
Thanks for sharing it with us!

River of "Light ~ Gordon Lightfoot

(E) (Bsus4)
(E) Heading off on a river at peace in the cool of an evening
(A) Heading off on a river of light, be part of a river at night
(E) Nice to be on a river sometimes, like a June bug travelling
(A) Heading off on a ribbon of song, been away from the river too long
(E) Good to be on a river somewhere, like a milkweed travelling
(A) Heading off on a ribbon of dreams, (F#m) be a part of a river it seems
(E) Can you tell me how (Bsus4) long must I travel (E) on
I (A) won't be looking up old friends
I (Bsus4) won't be looking up old friends ever a(A)gain (Bsus4) (G) (E)

I spent my life taking my time and I can't change anything
Take a look at my river of light, be a part of a river at night
Nice to be on a river at peace, like a June bug travelling
Heading off on a river at last, my tears will be all in the past
Good to be on a river somewhere, like a milkweed travelling
Heading down where the water runs deep, down deep where the fish are asleep now
Can you tell me how long must I travel on
I won't be looking up old friends
I won't be looking up old friends ever again

Trouble don't mean nothing to me and I had my share of it
Heading off on a river of light, be a part of a river at night
Nice to be on a river at peace in the cool of an evening
Heading off on a silver moonlight, maybe love'll find me tonight
Good to be on a river somewhere, like a milkweed travelling
Heading off on a ribbon of dreams, be a part of a river it seems
Can you tell me how long must I travel on
I won't be looking up old friends
I won't be looking up old friends ever again, ever again, ever again
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 12:01 PM
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23. My dear Haole Girl... Updated at 9:21 PM
Oh, thank you for sharing this!

I had not seen it, and I can see why you thought of it...

Yes, rivers make terrific metaphors for much of what happens to us...


:hug:
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17. Wow, I'd love to have the audio file if you ever record this.
I have a lot of churning thoughts right now, but if I carefully dodge the boulders and assorted obstacles (placed by my husband), I will be okay.

And I do see the occasional deer at the heavily-wooded safe house where I am staying! :)
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CaliforniaPeggy Donating Member (1000+ posts)  Journal Click to send private message to this author Click to view this author's profile Click to add this author to your buddy list Click to add this author to your Ignore list Donate to DU! Sun Nov-01-09 12:03 PM
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24. My dear Pool Hall Ace!Updated at 9:21 PM
Now, I hadn't thought of recording this, but I sure could!

PM me your email, if you haven't already, OK?

I'm glad this fits so well with your life now...

And I hope things work out really well for you...

Thanks for your very kind comments, sweetie...

:hug:
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