Eulogy for America

[killbotfactory]

Here's a caustic political rant I just finished. I needed to get it off my chest, thought some people on DU might enjoy it for what it is.

Keep in mind I had just finished reading Naked Lunch, and I think it might have influenced some of the imagery and language I used. It was kind of thereputic to write.

If you have and criticism or see any typo's I missed, please feel free to point them out.

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Eulogy For America
1776 - 2004

WARNING: The following rant will cause anal bleeding, vomiting, diarrhea, and most likely will offend the mother that shat you out of her womb. Destroy before reading. You have been warned, and I don’t want to hear you bitch about it, asshole.

Palsied fingers, stench of dead cunt, flip through a bible. Cum shot over the favorite versus stick pages together. A bloodstained diamond studded Rolex watch. Jim Jones sunglasses slicked back hair combed over his bald spot. Beer belly poking over his red-white-blue diamond belt buckle and distracting from the erection in his cheap slacks. Spittle forms at the edges of the mans mouth as he yells into a microphone his bible lesson above the “amens”, “hallelujah’s”, and gibberish tongues of the spirit infected crowd. Key words in the speech trigger predictable responses. “Jeeeesus”, “Liberul”, “Gawd”, “Amurica”, “Freedom”. Blood and grey matter decorate his fancy loafers and the bottoms of his pant leg. A dead woman lies at his feet, head shattered with a stone statue of the ten commandments, draped in a dirty blood-stained white sheet. Security guards a red velvet rope holding back a line of drooling good ol’ boys with lust in their eyes. A stocky middle-aged woman stands on a pedestal behind the preacher, dressed in a sparkling gown spangled and striped with bulky shoulder pads (made in china), waving a tiny American flag (made in china) and in lady liberty tiara (made in china). A white diamond cross across her breast. The burka of the Talibornagain. Botox sheen and perma-smile decorate her face. A smiling blank slate with soulless eyes. The crowd agrees. this is a day of rejoicing.

The voting block of star-spangled bible thumping fucktards has spoken. God fucking damn them. Their brave leader, a spoiled frat-boy sissy asshole with a messiah complex who destroyed all the brains his beloved creator gave him through drug-abuse, ruined nearly everything he ever touched, and failed at almost everything he’d ever tried (before being born again and therefore good), has been elected president. These self-righteous asshats, most of whom don’t even know what’s in the god damned documents they claim are so fucking sacred, have murdered America, and they have done so with all the gleeful bloodlust of an awkward teenage boy as he liquidates the head of a retard with a giant rock to impress his pack of friends. The joyous celebration of hoots and hollers resulting in this ancient tribal custom of genetic cleansing only spoiled by incessant twitching and piss puddle produced by the lifeless retards pathetic broken shell.

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(pdf version) http://brainsaw.org/pdf/euology.pdf
(text version) http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/13686248/

[Fenris]

1. Burroughs would be proud.

:thumbsup:

[marions ghost]

2. first paragraph

conveys your anger while giving me a strong image to hold onto.

second paragraph is pure raw anger which tells me how angry you are
but your first paragraph already told me that in a more effective way

even angry rants need images and context and associations, otherwise it's too general and you could be talking about your car mechanic who ripped you off yesterday
you could expand the second paragraph and make it more specific

I don't mean to cool your anger, just to focus it more for readers to enter into it, otherwise it's a wall of white noise

Writing is fine for venting and so are punching bags--but if you post it, then it's about communicating, getting across a message

Sorry if you think this reaction is too analytical, can't help it.
Take it or leave it. Meant as constructive. Sincerely, mg