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Edited on Sat Nov-27-04 07:11 PM by Longgrain
Here a little sample of my novel, just a few descriptive paragraphs so it doesn't reveal too much of the story...
This is about an old abandoned amusement park somewhere in the middle of the woods on the edge of the little suburban town where the story takes place.
The amusement park figures prominently in the novel, and nearly all the major characters end up there/ have experiences there/ or are some how connected to this weird place of mystery.
BTW, just to protect myself, this is copyrighted, and I have enough people who have seen it/ read it to back me up...so no stealing!
But in the spirit of DU, I offer it freely here at least for your consideration. I hope you like it it...
Long ago, she had been called the Queen of the Meadow--a long fairway of brightly lit art-deco architecture trimmed with the swirling circles of motorized amusements and the white, wooden frame of a multi-humped roller coaster, growing like a long, lacy crown down her back. On hot summer nights, her lights could be seen like distant fires penetrating the deep woodlands far from the town centers. Millions of multicolored specks formed whirling galaxies and shooting stars like a tiny patch of the heavens above mistakenly grafted onto the earth. Even during the daytime, she proudly wore her gaudy carnival gown, like a poor naive country girl, coming down from the hills, going to town in her Sunday best.
The entire town considered themselves fortunate to be invited to sip at one of her candy-coated domes.
The children came to laugh at her but still wanted ride her pretty ponies.
Their elders came to enjoy her pleasant company and remember their own first encounters with her long ago.
But there were those mad souls, like Edwin K--, who came to find fear and delight in her seductively dark crevices, her narrowing hallways, and her tunneling chambers.
But some of those chambers had become too tight over the years, and the innocence of Meadow Park would soon be lost.
A little snip to edit out some parts that concern the characters...
After its closing, the park stood idle for a few years--hiding in the woodlands, like the paper hats and streamers of a particularly wild New Years Eve party that nobody was interested in cleaning up after--as, piece by piece, her shimmering rides and sparkling ornamentations were slowly lifted off, taken away by other parks around the northeast, to pay back her owners creditors. Some said it would have gone bankrupt in a few more years anyways as larger, shinier parks sprang up, further away, with masses of steel
loops that threw their riders in all directions. But others had hope that she would rise again.
They called her Meadow Park.
The Meadow Queen.
The last stop on the Meadow Street trolley line.
But the Queen of Meadow was slowly reclaimed by the earth.
But for all that was taken away, something was left behind among the scattered trees and wild flowers to commemorate the joy that once thrived there.
Most of the buildings remained, and remained standing for years, until fire or heavy snows turned them down. Only the fun house stood fully intact--empty on the corner of a dead end street.
Most of the roller coaster remained standing too. Its new owners were only interested in its lift hill chain and its motor. Parts of its white scaffolding had collapsed over the years, forming spirals of spoked wood on the hillside. Just as many humped outlines of track still flowed above the trees; but the cars of its train were left upside down to rust in the long grass, and its thunder crack was heard no more.
A tarnished Ferris wheel remained as well, but its carriages had been removed and tree branches grew through its aperture. Other empty carts and machinery still hid under vast bushes, as well as a few more long decaying delights for those who were intrigued enough to look for them, but most of the concrete field was empty with only the bolted, slabbed foot prints of what once stood marking the place of what had once been.
By the DUer known as Longgrain.
On Edit: Sorry but, for some reason the paragraphs aren't indented.
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