I'm entered in the Amazon Breakthrough Novel competition [View all]

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Last edited Mon Jan 23, 2012, 06:07 PM - Edit history (1)

and I have a few more days to edit the "Pitch" segment of my entry. One is already in the machine but if you are willing, I'd appreciate your feedback on my rewrite.


In Cherokee legend it is said that at the beginning of the world people and animals spoke and understood each other’s languages. While on a walk through Central Park, Nikki Twig has a magical encounter with a carriage horse that sends her back to Oklahoma where she meets her biological father, Weep, and is welcomed into the Cherokee family she never knew she had.

Nikki grew up unloved and abused by her family until Wally, a Cherokee social worker with a big heart and lots of courage, removed her from a criminally abusive situation. At Wally’s funeral, Nikki learns that she is not the person she thinks she is and that she and her best friend and sister-cousin, Bee, are related not only to each other but also to Wally through a Cherokee bloodline.

The secrets of Nikki’s past become unlocked when she meets Weep. On a trail ride through Osage County, Weep surprises Nikki by giving her the carriage horse that he rescued from New York as a birthday present. On the second day of the trail ride, a band of wild horses cuts through the middle of the riders and Nikki hears her mare’s unmistakable plea to join the black stallion leading the herd and sets her free. This act of letting go forms an unbreakable bond Weep and Nikki and helps her life come together on many levels when the final link in her genealogy that relates her to Bee is revealed.

WEEP is a general fiction novel set in present day Oklahoma (75,111 words) that will appeal to readers interested in Native American lore or in Cherokee culture and history