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Related: Culture Forums, Support ForumsI'm terribly embarrassed, but I need grammar help on this little poem please.......
It's for my husband's anniversary card....can someone please correct anything wrong in the grammar department....and thank you.
As in the essence of the Opal......
The ups and downs,
The positives and negatives,
The happys the sads,
The laughs the cries....
All facets of our 34 years.....
Together, Ill love you forever.
arcane1
(38,613 posts)a kennedy
(31,930 posts)and done.
CaliforniaPeggy
(151,886 posts)I think he'll love it!
And I agree about the apostrophes.
OffWithTheirHeads
(10,337 posts)Forget the past. It's gone and you can't change it.
Forget the future. It hasn't happened and you can't predict it.
Forget the present. I didn't buy you one.
edited to add Congrats!
onehandle
(51,122 posts)This isn't a cover letter for a job application.
Raffi Ella
(4,465 posts)Happy Anniversary!
Ino
(3,366 posts)and lose the apostrophes in happys and sads
Beautiful poem!
mrmpa
(4,033 posts)write:
The happy and the sad, not pluralize it. Also the way I've written, it follows the preceding line which uses the word "and".
oldandhappy
(6,719 posts)Happy Anniversary. I agree with the above suggestions re ' and ,. Really, what matters is that you are still together and you wanted to do this. Huge hugs.
Skittles
(158,410 posts)and per a previous suggestion - the laughs, and the cries
it's very simple and very lovely
UTUSN
(72,273 posts)"Together, I'll love you forever" sounds like, I'll ONLY love you if we're together.