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begin_within Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-23-09 11:15 PM
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Write a haiku about this week
I'll give it a shot:

two million people
swarming the gates of power
without one arrest
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NMDemDist2 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-23-09 11:17 PM
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1. i'll give it a shot
Edited on Fri Jan-23-09 11:24 PM by NMDemDist2
Obama Nation
sweeping the planet with Hope
Let the change begin
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begin_within Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-23-09 11:19 PM
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2. nice imagery
although the haiku format is supposed to be:

5 syllables
7 syllables
5 syllables
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NMDemDist2 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-23-09 11:20 PM
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3. edited
Edited on Fri Jan-23-09 11:24 PM by NMDemDist2
:P
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begin_within Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-23-09 11:57 PM
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7. inspiring
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BeatleBoot Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-23-09 11:31 PM
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4. 5-7-5 then...I'll give it a shot...
Edited on Fri Jan-23-09 11:40 PM by BeatleBoot
Watched a Judge Screw Up

It was really frickin' cold

Republicans suck



Or wait, on edit, here's a good one....



Bush Sucks Bush Sucks Bush

Sucks Bush Sucks Bush Sucks Bush Sucks

Bush Sucks Bush Sucks Sucks











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napoleon_in_rags Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-23-09 11:49 PM
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5. ...
Edited on Fri Jan-23-09 11:58 PM by napoleon_in_rags
I dreamed about love
except when I woke up it
wasn't just a dream.

***

Sitting in a crowd
the theater is all full
I can't see the screen

(I saw it in y towns movie theater, standing room only)

***

America is
Just an opportunity
we have to take it.

(I kinda like that!)
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tularetom Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Fri Jan-23-09 11:54 PM
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6. My effort
dick in a wheelchair
chief justice fucks up the oath
Obama: "I won!"
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liberalmuse Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 12:05 AM
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8. My first haiku.
Fresh face in power,
Barack HUSSEIN Obama.
Suck on it, Freepers!
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nolabear Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 12:12 AM
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9. Here are my offerings


In the midst of it
The reasons why it matters
Sasha, Malia



Brilliant news week ends.
Just one headline left to see:
"Limbaugh's Head Explodes"


What is this wonder?
Oh! I remember it now!
It's untroubled sleep.
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Ikonoklast Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 12:18 AM
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10. Here ya go
a new day began
the tired nation hopes for change
we will move forward

you see before us
the man takes up our burden
the world takes notice
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trackfan Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 12:29 AM
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11. okay...
It was a good day,
even though the poetry
reading rather sucked.

There were some iambs,
but it scanned better as prose,
all things considered.
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tomreedtoon Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 12:30 AM
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12. You won't like this one...
No celebration
By rich guys can bring back the
Dead in New Orleans.
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nolabear Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 12:41 AM
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13. I actually like it quite a lot
Though I have to admit I don't exactly understand it.
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Rowdyboy Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 12:45 AM
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14. I've read every offering so far and you original post is by far the best....
Edited on Sat Jan-24-09 12:46 AM by Rowdyboy
Good show....

two million people
swarming the gates of power
without one arrest

Not bad my friend :thumbsup:
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MadBadger Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 12:48 AM
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15. This describes my inauguration perfectly
Missed First day of class.
It is all Obama's fault
Some things never change.
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DiehardLiberal Donating Member (111 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 01:01 AM
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16. It's been over 40 years since I wrote a haiku in school, but here goes...
Raging against George Bush,
Collapsed at Obama's feet
At last, I can breathe...
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Peace Patriot Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 01:50 AM
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17. It's more than 5-7-5. The three lines are not meant to be just one long prose line,
that reveals a fully developed thought, that flows from line to line. It is more a matter of putting two well-observed, captivating images together--unrelated images, or contrasting images--and aiming for a third, resolving image, or commentary image, or even a yet more puzzling image, for line 3. The goal is not to TELL the reader something (an abstract message), but rather to draw the reader into the images, to create his/her own connections. For instance:

Michelle's wind-blown hair.
I can't watch the bomb footage.
Amber waves of grain.


(This haiku references a particular photo of Michelle's hair blowing in the wind, as Michelle and Barack walked down steps to the inaugural platform, my personal, emotional reaction to the news footage from Palestine, and a phrase from "America, the Beautiful" about the loveliness of our own land, the fertility of the earth, and our once-fabled prosperity. Draw your own conclusion: some beauty in this week, for sure, and a bit of wild Nature (wind-blown hair), but portents of trouble, and an agonizing effort to come back to beauty, to think of ourselves and our land as beautiful, when we are paying for the bombs, and supporting the bombing, and now face hardship--perhaps great hardship--because of all the bombs we make and peddle around the world, because of our failures as citizens. It is not a great haiku. But it illustrates sort of what a haiku is supposed to do: Explode with meaning!)

Washington DC.
Two million folks--no crime!
They wheel Cheney out.


(Maybe a little too messagey. Try again...)

Washington DC.
Night sky at home blazing stars.
I burn sage. No cat!


(Damned if I know what it means. Haikus are sometimes very enigmatic. But it's provocative, don't you think? What happened to my cat? What does that have to do with Washington DC? And where am I, to be blessed with a clear, star-studded night sky? Two macrocosms. One microcosm: cleansing; absence, loss.)

(One more try...)

Steve Jobs sick--oh no!
Obama sworn in two times!
Alabama '65.


(Nope, I'm not going to even try to explain it!)




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LiberalPersona Donating Member (679 posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 08:34 AM
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18. ..
Edited on Sat Jan-24-09 08:41 AM by LiberalPersona
A new age began
Ending the rule of evil
Thank you Obama
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PBS Poll-435 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 08:37 AM
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19. Yesterday
Kirsten Gillibrand
Smart, Young, Capable Woman
An Excellent Choice
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PBS Poll-435 Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 08:42 AM
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20. Another
Purity Patrol:
Please Give It A Fucking Rest
Your "Concern" Is Fake
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AngryAmish Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 09:23 AM
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21. Here goes:
Barack gives us life
We need his love forever
Help us puny things
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Mayberry Machiavelli Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 09:36 AM
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22. Okay:

millions of my best friends
packed like sardines together
freezing our ass off

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Spirochete Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 01:44 PM
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23. OK
Our new president
Is changing things already
Life will get better
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intaglio Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 03:02 PM
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24. I'll try
Icy wind and sun

Justice slips before the crowd

Eagle flies again

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gardenista Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Sat Jan-24-09 03:41 PM
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25. here's mine
gleaming sunshine day
showing light on dark places
this will set us free
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