What do you think?

[Nadienne]

I wrote this with the intention of sending it to the local newspaper as a letter to the editor.

Any feedback is appreciated:

We have a right to govern ourselves, to control our lives; one way we do this is by electing officials to represent us in government. If those we elect do not represent us, we have the power to elect someone else.

To limit the authority of government is to limit our own authority over ourselves and things that affect us.

Privatization and capitalism take authority away from the voting public and give authority to corporate leaders and stock holders - to people whose primary interest is making bigger profits.

The goal of capitalism is to command a larger share of the market than their competitors have, to gain more consumers and thus take more profits. The goal of capitalism is not to compete, but to be the victor and eventually dominate.

And, due to lateral and horizontal corporate mergers, and due to the exportation of jobs - which raises unemployment, and which lowers wages as more people compete for a limited number of jobs - capitalism begins to resemble the bad things, the limited employment options and consumer options, of Communism.

(edit to fix typos)

[MrSoundAndVision]

1. typo

You meant "consumers" not "consumbers". Also:

"A little revolution is health now and again..."
- Thomas Jefferson

[Nadienne]

2. Thank you

Fixed!

:)

[asthmaticeog]

3. typo

You meant "healthy," not "health."

Sorry, couldn't resist!

[PATRICK]

4. Consider

that even the most conspiratorial super entities will dominate and oppress their own kind, eventually more viciously than the commoners. Also that commoner stockholders such as pension funds, unions, civil interest groups, when not complacent with financing their own enslavement, must be checked and disempowered as well.

There is no comfortable stop to oppression until it ruins the ground under its own feet. The quote about absolute power(rather the desire for the illusion)holds true for business as well, maybe more so since runaway greed is arguably worse in its social effect.

The isolation of the few from scrutiny is the real trick as everyone is slave to a system devoid of the customary religious props, naked military power and low levels of education and civilization.

A few arrogant men and a network of lies and manmade illusions.

[Nadienne]

6. It is my intention to inspire

the masses to scrutinize the few. Slowly but surely...

I hope we are close to the point where oppression crushes itself. But I'm not certain that this is a foregone conclusion...

Thank you for your insight.

[RichM]

5. Well, some of it is OK, some is not so good. But mainly - trying to treat

these matters in a letter to the editor is completely impossible. You just don't get enough space to do it. Your topic would take a decent-sized essay to do justice to.

The word "capitalization" is not the word you are looking for. In the last sentence, at least, you really mean "capitalism."

I would rework (or forget about) most of the last sentence. Comparisons between capitalism and communism are way too complex to be handled in one little sentence. And actually, though what Americans call "Communism" had severe problems, unemployment was not one of them. // On the other hand, I agree that US capitalism is coming to resemble the USSR version of communism in some respects. In particular, our media has now become an instrument of state propaganda. It's no better than Pravda was, though the institutional mechanisms operate differently.

[Nadienne]

7. I heard somewhere

that no government practices Communism as Communism was intended. Thank you for your critique; I will rewrite the last sentence and make it clear that I am talking about the USSR's Communism...