Help Please, Critique this Democratic Campaign Ad Idea...

[Laura PourMeADrink]

I need a critique for my campaign ad idea. I think I need better verbiage..
Background: Patriotic music playing

Video Clip: JFK's famous "Ich bin ein Berliner" speech



Voice Over: Do you remember how America was once revered and admired in the world?



Voice Over When America promoted peace?


Voice Over And building bridges?






Background Switch to more serious, somber music

Voice Over Did you know that in a BBC poll, 11 countries(Source)http://news.bbc.co.uk/2/hi/americas/2994924.stm)were asked who is the more dangerous to world peace and stability, the United States was rated higher than al-Qaeda by respondents in both Jordan (71%) and Indonesia (66%). America was also rated more dangerous than two countries considered as "rogue states" by Washington.

It was rated more dangerous than Iran, by people in Jordan, Indonesia, Russia, South Korea and Brazil, and more dangerous than Syria by respondents all the countries, except for Australia, Israel and the United States.








Voice over Is this the way you want America to be seen in the world? We believe there's a better way, a more peaceful way.


VOTE DEMOCRATIC.