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alcibiades_mystery Donating Member (1000+ posts) Send PM | Profile | Ignore Tue Nov-01-05 06:30 PM
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35. Dawn breaks after night, not winter (there are cold winter dawns...)
Also, you may want to revise these two sentences for rhythm:

Courage, it seems, is hard to come by in politics these days. The members of this community were, to put it mildly, deeply disappointed by the decision of so many Democrats to support Mr. Bush's march to war back in 2003.

The inclusion of the bolded portions in BOTH sentences gives the two together a bit of a staccato feel. I say cut the interjection in the second sentence. Deeply disappointed is enough. You don't have to put it mildly.

Otherwise, terrific work. I'll sign it.
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