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Sun Jan 27, 2013, 02:06 AM

steep

nobody goes in snows the way furry freaks do
hipping and hopping through the quick pines
leapiní off the peaks to pop up in the sweet air
orange sunshine avowed, a cloud porpoise with steamy breath
tubbed in a snowy bowl
cold cotton newfall, rubbing it in their hair, snorfling and rolling to slide far down the hill
over the edge of the mountain and the granite goes by in a flash
floof! the deepest of the deep they live for centuries down there
the plumes of special blue cold dancing for the next storm
so quiet so snow forest quiet underneath the full moon
til they come singiní! singing down through trees
shaking the deep off, toes flexing on frozen ice waterfalls
and whooping! mad red faces pushing faster ever faster
leaping down the trees and shushing off white walls
naked! and cold! and alive! and still moving
hot water

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Response to byronius (Original post)

Sun Jan 27, 2013, 02:15 AM

1. Nice imagery!

I like how it transitions between the snow and other environments!

Good job, my dear byronius...

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Reply #1)

Sun Jan 27, 2013, 03:07 AM

2. Gracias. And you are well? As a significant pattern on this spinning ball of mud?

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Response to byronius (Reply #2)

Sun Jan 27, 2013, 10:33 AM

3. I am as well as can be expected, thank you!

I am recovering from shoulder surgery, and it's no picnic. I am progressing, however glacially!

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