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Sun May 13, 2012, 09:33 PM

A new song...

...it's been a long time since I wrote anything new.



The Shade

I miss you again.
Don't know
how you got so burried.
This is where I fail.

I selpt though it again.
Don't know
how you got so married.
This is where I fell.

The sun wove the shade.
The sun dove around a decade.
Our son said, "Please dream-catcher, let the good dreams flow."

I hope I see you again.
I hope I see.

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rbnyc May 2012 OP
SoFlaJet May 2012 #1
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Response to rbnyc (Original post)

Sun May 20, 2012, 08:34 AM

1. cool sound

my only advice would be (if I was asked) would be to cut the intro down a few bars and get to the singing sooner-otherwise-i like it

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Response to SoFlaJet (Reply #1)

Mon May 21, 2012, 11:53 AM

2. Thanks so much for listening...

...and good call.

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