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Wed Dec 21, 2011, 01:31 PM

Celebrate with me!

A very recent poem is going to be published in the periodical Decanto, from England!

I just got the email today! It's so validating to have someone who doesn't know me want to publish my work.

Midnight Balloons

purple shadows
damp
and
cold

in the dark
on the sidewalk

black sky no moon

lights off
no hustle
for this
locked building

balloons tethered
limp from days
aloft
sagging strings

not even trying
to
float

away



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Reply Celebrate with me! (Original post)
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 OP
geardaddy Dec 2011 #1
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #2
nolabear Dec 2011 #3
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #4
Mira Dec 2011 #5
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #6
pacalo Dec 2011 #7
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #9
OriginalGeek Dec 2011 #8
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #10
MrScorpio Dec 2011 #11
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #12
WCGreen Dec 2011 #13
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #14
backtoblue Dec 2011 #15
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #19
ohiosmith Dec 2011 #16
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #20
Phentex Dec 2011 #17
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #21
Raven Dec 2011 #18
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #22
RebelOne Dec 2011 #23
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #25
Kali Dec 2011 #24
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #26
hifiguy Dec 2011 #27
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #28
emilyg Dec 2011 #29
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #36
Aristus Dec 2011 #30
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #37
applegrove Dec 2011 #31
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #38
MiddleFingerMom Dec 2011 #32
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #39
av8rdave Dec 2011 #33
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #40
Ohio Joe Dec 2011 #34
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #41
AllenVanAllen Dec 2011 #35
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #42
denbot Dec 2011 #43
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #45
ellisonz Dec 2011 #44
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #46
mentalsolstice Dec 2011 #47
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #48
IcyPeas Dec 2011 #49
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #50
bluesbassman Dec 2011 #51
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #52
Luciferous Dec 2011 #53
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #54
MrsBrady Dec 2011 #55
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #56
DFW Dec 2011 #57
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #59
6000eliot Dec 2011 #58
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #60
abq e streeter Dec 2011 #61
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #64
Tobin S. Dec 2011 #62
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #65
sibelian Dec 2011 #63
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #66
Stuart G Dec 2011 #67
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #70
HipChick Dec 2011 #68
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #71
femmocrat Dec 2011 #69
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #72
Dystopian Dec 2011 #73
CaliforniaPeggy Dec 2011 #74

Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 01:32 PM

1. Congrats Peggy!

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Response to geardaddy (Reply #1)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 01:33 PM

2. Thank you so much, my dear geardaddy!

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 01:34 PM

3. My dear CaliforniaPeggy!

Congratulations. What a great affirmation of your talent and dedication. Kee 'em coming!

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Response to nolabear (Reply #3)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 01:36 PM

4. My dear nolabear!

It really is. This one is the result of my recent workshop...

You can bet I'll keep 'em coming!

If I don't let the words out, they make me crazy!

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 01:48 PM

5. Congratulations. It is a beautiful poem,

puts me right there to see it and feel it.

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Response to Mira (Reply #5)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 01:54 PM

6. Thank you, my dear Mira!

This is what I was trying to do...

It was a Jiffy Lube, of all places, and I saw it on the way home from my workshop. The way it looked just struck me and this poem was the result.



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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 01:59 PM

7. That's impressive! A hearty congratulations, CalPeggy!










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Response to pacalo (Reply #7)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 02:04 PM

9. Thank you, my dear pacalo!

Wow, that is one beautiful graphic!

You are truly too kind...

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 02:03 PM

8. I've been a CaliforniaPeggy fan since my first day on DU

And this awesome poem and wonderful news only reinforces that feeling.

Congratulations!

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Response to OriginalGeek (Reply #8)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 02:05 PM

10. Thank you so much, my dear OriginalGeek!

I am truly grateful for your very kind remarks, sweetie...

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 02:07 PM

11. Congrats, Peggy Love!

May the poetry force be with you.

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Response to MrScorpio (Reply #11)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 02:09 PM

12. Thank you, my dear MrScorpio!

I always hope for that!

I guess it was, this time...

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:01 PM

13. Good Job Peg....

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Response to WCGreen (Reply #13)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:02 PM

14. Thanks, Chris!

It means a lot...

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:04 PM

15. Awesome Peggy!!!

Your talent is inspiring and congrats on your publication!!!

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Response to backtoblue (Reply #15)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:09 PM

19. Thank you, my dear backtoblue!

I've never thought of myself as awesome...

That means a lot!

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:05 PM

16. Cheers CP!


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Response to ohiosmith (Reply #16)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:14 PM

20. Thank you so much, my dear ohiosmith! n/t

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:07 PM

17. Hooray!

That's wonderful, CP!

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Response to Phentex (Reply #17)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:15 PM

21. Thank you so much, my dear Phentex!

Glad you enjoyed...

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:09 PM

18. Peggy, that is a beautiful, wonderful poem. Congrats!

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Response to Raven (Reply #18)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:16 PM

22. Thank you so much, my dear Raven...

You never know when inspiration will strike...

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:26 PM

23. Wonderful poem. Congrats, Peggy. n/t

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Response to RebelOne (Reply #23)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:32 PM

25. Thank you so much, my dear RebelOne...It means a lot! n/t

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:28 PM

24. congrats!

you should submit your xmas card photo to a few contests or somehting. really! (not that I know anything more about photography than poetry, but I like dem pichers better'n werds hee hee)

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Response to Kali (Reply #24)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:34 PM

26. Thanks, Kali!

Aw, shucks, girl!

I gotta tell you, the professional photographers are head and shoulders above me in quality! I get a good shot now and then.

Glad you liked the poem...even if you do like pictures better than words, lol!

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:35 PM

27. Congratulations, my dear California Peggy!!

Nice work!

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Response to hifiguy (Reply #27)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 04:38 PM

28. Thank you, my dear hifiguy!

Now and then, I get it right...

And then a happy publisher does too!

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 11:29 PM

29. Huge congratulations!

 

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Response to emilyg (Reply #29)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 03:19 AM

36. Thank you, my dear emilyg!

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 11:31 PM

30. Excellent poem, CalPeg!

Great images. No surprise that it's being published. Congratulations!

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Response to Aristus (Reply #30)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 03:20 AM

37. Thank you so much, my dear Aristus!

I really appreciate your very kind words!

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Wed Dec 21, 2011, 11:33 PM

31. Great news Peggy.

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Response to applegrove (Reply #31)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 03:21 AM

38. I thank you, my dear applegrove!

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 12:20 AM

32. Excellent!!!

.
.
.
Flowing language (except for the effective and not-at-all jarring
double-dead-end streets of Lines 3 & 4 -- intriguing).
.
The epitome of distillation... I don't see a wasted word in it.
.
It seems to hint you were in a dark or low or negative mood at its
conception -- I certainly hope you're feeling better!!!
.
.
.
Funny, I've been noticing and thinking about balloons myself recently --
starting with about a week ago when I was walking on a sidewalk and
facing oncoming traffic. At a fair distance in front of me and rising
fairly quickly was a double-line of big orange balloons in an inverted
U-shape (like you might walk through or under at a party or ceremony).
SOMEHOW, they were maintaining their U-shape. I stared mesmerized
for minutes until they disappeared.
.
They were behind and above the oncoming drivers -- and when I was
aware of my immediate surroundings again, I laughed to think what
THEY were thinking of the slack-jawed man standing on the eside of
the road staring up and into space.
.

.
.
I'm certainly happy you've started submitting your work again -- it's
extremely gratifying to get positive feedback from the professionals of
one's art/craft.
.
You know, if only Kali wrote poetry of your caliber (snicker), she would
be the Poet Lariat of Arizona.
.
.
.

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Response to MiddleFingerMom (Reply #32)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 03:28 AM

39. My dear MiddleFingerMom!

Not sure I follow what you're saying about lines 3 and 4...

I do make every effort to have every word speak clearly. I want my poetry to be distilled down to the minimum, while maximizing the impact.

I love your balloon story! That must have been quite a sight. Your description makes me see them...

Poet Lariat?

Oh, and I meant to mention that I was not in a down mood at all, when I saw the sight I wrote about. I was on my way home from the workshop when I saw this, and I was feeling quite happy with how things were going. And I'm still happy!

Thank you for your critique! I really appreciate it.

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 01:25 AM

33. Congrats!

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Response to av8rdave (Reply #33)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 03:29 AM

40. My dear av8rdave: Thanks, sweetie! n/t

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 01:28 AM

34. Sweet, congrats Peg!

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Response to Ohio Joe (Reply #34)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 03:30 AM

41. Thank you so much, my dear Ohio Joe! n/t

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 01:40 AM

35. Most excellent Peggy!





not even trying
to
float

away



I love that.

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Response to AllenVanAllen (Reply #35)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 03:32 AM

42. My dear AllenVanAllen!

I want to say how much your critique means to me...

As an artist in your own right...

Those last lines just showed up in my head, as though there were some sort of poetic synthesis going on...

I appreciate your kind words so very much...

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 05:09 AM

43. You've gone international!!

Mucho congrats!!!

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Response to denbot (Reply #43)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 12:26 PM

45. My dear denbot!

I have!

Thanks, sweetie!

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 05:45 AM

44. You're describing a car dealership or a Verizon store.

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Response to ellisonz (Reply #44)

Thu Dec 22, 2011, 12:27 PM

46. You're close!

It was a Jiffy Lube place...

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Fri Dec 23, 2011, 08:34 PM

47. Congrats!

Decanto appears to be a very "competitive" venue. Bless your heart for all your efforts, and it paid off.

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Response to mentalsolstice (Reply #47)

Fri Dec 23, 2011, 08:50 PM

48. Thank you!

The editor has printed my work before...

But it's always a very pleasant surprise.

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Fri Dec 23, 2011, 09:43 PM

49. congrats - what a nice Christmas present

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Response to IcyPeas (Reply #49)

Fri Dec 23, 2011, 10:02 PM

50. Thank you!

It certainly was!

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Fri Dec 23, 2011, 10:19 PM

51. Wonderful!

Nice to be recognized for your efforts, and I like the poem too. Congratulations.

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Response to bluesbassman (Reply #51)

Fri Dec 23, 2011, 10:41 PM

52. I thank you, my dear bluesbassman!

It IS such a good feeling...

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Fri Dec 23, 2011, 10:49 PM

53. Congrats Peggy!

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Response to Luciferous (Reply #53)

Fri Dec 23, 2011, 10:58 PM

54. Thank you, my dear Luciferous!

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 12:04 AM

55. congrats!

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Response to MrsBrady (Reply #55)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 12:08 AM

56. I thank you, my dear MrsBrady!

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 03:00 AM

57. That is wonderful news!

And a great boost to the old ego--just in time for the holidays.

Ro-BAIR, Anne, Zorro and Juanita Chang are hoping to join you soon!!

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Response to DFW (Reply #57)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 03:20 AM

59. Thank you so much, my dear DFW!

It is a grand boost to my ego, and to my sense of worth as a poet too!

I'm hoping so much to see my old friends too!

Keep me informed, OK?

Did you get the card? I don't know if you've been home to Germany yet...that's where it went.

Merry Christmas!

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 03:07 AM

58. Congratulations, Peggy!

You have gotten so good at writing poetry. I'm envious.

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Response to 6000eliot (Reply #58)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 03:22 AM

60. My dear 6000eliot...

Please don't be envious, sweetie...

It takes work, and I still have much to learn.

I let the world around me, and my own emotions and thoughts inspire me...

You can do it too...

And thank you for your very kind words!

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 03:48 AM

61. Congratulations ! That is wonderful news.

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Response to abq e streeter (Reply #61)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 12:02 PM

64. Thank you so much, my dear abq e streeter! I appreciate your comments so much...

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 06:43 AM

62. Excellent!

It paints a picture in my mind and evokes emotion.

I'm not much of a poet or a very good interpreter of it. Was this an exercise in imagery for you or is there a metaphor there?

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Response to Tobin S. (Reply #62)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 12:06 PM

65. Thank you, my dear Tobin!

It was just my interpretation of what I saw...a Jiffy Lube building, late at night, when I was on my way home from my recent workshop. The poem describes how I felt on seeing this building, standing there in the dark. And the balloons were really sagging! So, no, not much metaphor going on here...

And so, yes, more an exercise in imagery...

I'm glad you enjoyed it!



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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 06:49 AM

63. Congratulations!


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Response to sibelian (Reply #63)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 12:07 PM

66. Thank you, my dear sibelian! :)

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 09:03 PM

67. Congratulations.

Many more poems to be published in the future...

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Response to Stuart G (Reply #67)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 09:21 PM

70. Thank you so much, my dear Stuart G!

I hope so...

I need to get off my tush and start submitting more...

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 09:05 PM

68. As a fellow bard..

that's awesome..

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Response to HipChick (Reply #68)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 09:23 PM

71. Thank you so much, my dear HipChick!

Oh, I didn't know you write too!

Sometime, you should share with us...

I'm glad you like my little work.

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 09:08 PM

69. Congratulations, Peggy!

The Lounge is very proud of you!

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Response to femmocrat (Reply #69)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 09:24 PM

72. Thank you so much, my dear femmocrat!

I guess you all are.....This post went up on Wednesday.....and you're still responding!

I appreciate your very kind words so much, sweetie...

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Response to CaliforniaPeggy (Original post)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 09:43 PM

73. Awesome....

Peggy

Congratulations!
I love the poem...
Feelings and visual ....

I'm celebrating with you...



peace~

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Response to Dystopian (Reply #73)

Sat Dec 24, 2011, 10:54 PM

74. Thank you, my dear Dystopian!

I'm so glad you like my poem!

Thanks for celebrating with me, sweetie...

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